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Scars by ^StJoan:iconStJoan:

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To paint me in perfection
would you include the scars?

Or would my skin be smooth
and even as caramel and twice as sweet?

Loving me would be loving them
and imperfections would be glorious
flames of beauty that shape
Me.

In paints, pastels or pencil
they would be there
perfectly.
©2005-2009 ^StJoan
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Submitted: March 19, 2005
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Still working on this piece, but with a fresh feeling and with some motivation now :)

Thanks to ~oddballoffun for sharing This piece . The feeling it invoked to see that I had affected someone is indescribable.
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Daily Deviation, 2008-06-28

Daily DeviationScars by ^StJoan. Beauty comes in all shapes, forms and size, which this poem demonstrates so well. Perfectly expressive, this poem has inspired beautiful artwork which I have also featured today. I hope that it also inspires you to find the beauty within imperfection. (Featured by $chix0r)

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~themuffinyamber:iconthemuffinyamber: Mar 19, 2005, 9:55:47 PM
Wow, I really like this... There's not much more I can say. :+fav:

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I would put, "I don't care," but that would indicate that I do indeed care, and that I would want you to read that.
"Tacos are like ... sex covered in salsa."- =thundercake
~flyawaywithme:iconflyawaywithme: Mar 19, 2005, 11:02:42 PM
very nice,
very thoughtful

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we were but stones, your light made us stars
she puts the weights into my little heart.
~ravensamdear:iconravensamdear: Mar 20, 2005, 1:17:40 AM
It's very good! if people reply positively to my work, then they should give you a standing aplause!

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I may act like a child but I am an adult...

"Optimism is the milk of dry cereal" - Sam

I'm melodramatic... so what?
~savvymoogle:iconsavvymoogle: Mar 20, 2005, 2:28:53 AM
I love this one, Ali... I don't think it needs a whole lot of work, but it's good how it is now... +fav
=LADESIGNER:iconLADESIGNER: Mar 20, 2005, 3:20:34 AM
Very good poem my dear... :clap::clap::clap:
:kiss::floating::kiss:

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:kiss::floating::kiss:
D'ont worry, bee happy!... :sun::hug::rose::frail:
"Rocks in the way? I keep all, one day I go to construct a castle..."
~Mischief-Maker:iconMischief-Maker: Mar 20, 2005, 6:49:37 AM
Wow...proof that it isnt in the quantity of the words, bu the quality of the mind behind them...beautiful!

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-Sleep Brings Relief-
~jasapunk:iconjasapunk: Mar 20, 2005, 10:34:39 AM
Excellent poem, conveys the message without too many flowery ridiculous words.

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Crystal is JASAPUNK: (J)ust (A)nother (S)tupid (A)ss PUNK.
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if going to church makes you a Christian, does giong to a garage make me an automobile?
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hey, you know what? FUCK YOU!
*inmyroom:iconinmyroom: Mar 21, 2005, 2:18:15 AM
Or would my skin be smooth
and even as caramel and twice as sweet?


Or would my skin be smooth like caramel
or even twice as sweet?

i found that part difficult to read, so maybe something like the 2nd one would read better?
anyway, i like this piece, its pretty and interesting :)
~Misaniovent:iconMisaniovent: Mar 22, 2005, 10:20:34 AM
Good.

Perfection is, to him, I hope, what you are.

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