You're writing about a school professor? the piece gives the impression at first that its a working man, of course, and then your line "then i would lean in the doorway" brings me the memory of doing that with my college professors...and me feeling stupid and arrogant for approaching a professor in such a casual way....but then the teacher (if it was a good one) never made me feel that way....

the repeated mention of papers calls to mind a professors's office, though at first i thought it might have been a newspaper staffer's room....i might have thrown in a line or two describing the odd knickknack you'd often find on the desk or on the shelf behind him....

and the final clue....who ever heard of a business man drinking tea? why noone! so it has to be a professor...

i like how simply worded the piece is, and at the very end you use the word "hubris" ...that's such a great word and it gives just a little bit of polish (collegeate polish ^_^) to the work...

cool

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This seems almost intentionally unnatural sounding. Is it?

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`roguewolf19 looks so Balla.

ooo.. interesting... like how this is vague (vs. obscure) ... it's so cool to see new stuff from you... we've been so deeply immersed in you novel that we haven't seen alot of your other works.. tis great chica!

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yeah a professor but really could be any man. i like the professor though.

i've gotten some real mixed feedback- real mixed.

from: this is too obvious, to too muddled , to not honest enough and then well...yeah. so i don't know
glad you do though

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`roguewolf19 looks so Balla.

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Life is what we make it, and the world is what we make it. The eyes of the cheerful and of the melancholy man are fixed upon the same creation; but very different are the aspects which it bears to them.
Albert Pike

Mh… this is also getting longer until the end… but I dunno if I like it that much here…
But I kind of like the idea and the iamges created throught your poem…

haha unintentional here

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`roguewolf19 looks so Balla.

wonderfully written. you have permission to keep writing (pretty please.)

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